Sample: rewritten and ghostwritten copy


A GRIM EXAMPLE


To showcase my rewriting services I went online, found an example of poor writing, then rewrote it. The text I used here I took from university coursework that presented samples of good and bad writing. This was the worst of the bad examples, making it the best one to use for my purposes.


UNEDITED ORIGINAL

Within our society, it has been shown that there is an individual. An individual with individual thoughts
and actions. But who determines whether or not he is correct in their choices? Are our thoughts brain
washed through the media with it’s hellish ideas or our closet friends that try to direct us in the right
direction? No one may ever know what is right or wrong. So what is ethical relativism anyway? And
who is behind all of the madness of ethical relativism? It has been said that relativist’s are believed to
think that relativism is true. Ethical Relativism is of a mind to say that whatever one’s culture says is
right is the right thing for him or her to do. One might conclude that the world we human beings live in
is not without a variety of many different and diverse cultures with different cultural practices and
hence different moralities. Studying ethics from a philosophical point of view, ethical relativist’s might
conclude that your wasting your time just like philosophers have always wasted they’re time.



These corrected drafts demonstrate the three rewrite services I offer:


BASIC (Correct mistakes in usage and grammar)

Individuals exist within their society. An individual has individual thoughts and actions. But who determines whether or not he is correct in his choices? Are our thoughts brainwashed through the media with its hellish ideas? Are they from our closet friends that try to direct us in the right direction? No one may ever know what is right or wrong.

So what is ethical relativism anyway? And who is behind all of the madness of ethical relativism? It has been said that relativists think that relativism is true. Ethical Relativism says that whatever one’s culture says is right is the right thing for him or her to do. One might argue that the world we human beings live in is not without a variety of many different and diverse cultures with different cultural practices and hence different moralities. By studying ethics from a philosophical point of view, ethical relativists might say, you are wasting your time just like philosophers have always wasted their time.


STANDARD (As above, plus structure enhancements for clarity)

Individuals within our society have individual thoughts and actions.  Who determines whether or not individuals are correct in their choices? Are our thoughts brainwashed through the media with its hellish ideas? Are they informed by our closest friends, who try to guide us in the right direction? One might never know what is right or wrong.

So what is ethical relativism, anyway? And who is behind all of the madness of ethical relativism? Relativists think that relativism is true, but is it? Ethical relativism says that whatever one’s culture says is right is the right thing to do. One might point out that the world we human beings live in holds many diverse cultures with different cultural practices, hence different moralities.  Ethical relativists might as well conclude that you are wasting your time studying ethics from a philosophical point of view and that philosophers have always wasted their time.


PREMIUM (Complete ghostwriting: restate the ideas)

I cannot agree with ethical relativism, the philosophy that says choices are correct if they agree with society's values. Which values are those? Do we get them from the media, with its hellish ideas, or instead from our close friends, who try to guide us in the right direction? And where do those friends get their values, in turn? On that basis, one can never be sure what is right or wrong.

In criticism of ethical relativism, one may point out that there are many diverse cultures in the world, with different practices, different values, and thus different moralities. It is madness to say they are all correct. The ethical relativist might as well say that studying ethics from any philosophical point of view except theirs is a waste of time and that philosophers have always wasted their time when they looked for firmer answers than relativism provides.


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